Just a quick sketch I made when I was bored.

http://fc01.deviantart.com/fs14/f/2007/084/f/7/Annelid__ish_Thing_by_Iced_Kirby.jpg
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/51653892/

Helpful Criticism is appreciated. :)

A little less overbite and the eyes more to the front of the worm.

A little less overbite and the eyes more to the front of the worm.

Thanks! :)

Next time, I'll compare the drawing with an official drawing, to see the mistakes I've made ;)

Thanks! :)

Next time, I'll compare the drawing with an official drawing, to see the mistakes I've made ;)You're welcome.

Also, try to make the lines darker. They're a little hard to see there.

I agree about making the lines darker. Either fiddle with the contrast, or use a layered imaging program to trace the lines.

And yeah, may be an idea to reduce that overbite, although there are questions of style I guess.

It's pretty nice, though. Next thing is to try different poses and costumes.

I like the big overbite, personally.

Don't be so jittery with your lines. The eyes are really rough. Try to make it cleaner.
And yes, find a way to change the contrast (turn it up) because it's really hard to make out right now.

Yes. My style, for example, has a big overbite as one of it's features.

As piggy has said. Cleaner and darker lines that aren't so scribbley.

My style has a bigger overbite as well. Just make it clearer, and after that, you'll be off to a great start!
Good luck!

Helpful Critism (Firefox is telling me I'm not spelling it right and not giving me the proper way, how do you spell it?) is appreciated. :)Helpful Criticism

the lip size is fine, but I think the problem with the lip area is the head, actually. perhaps it's only because the eyes are so far to the right, but the head looks overly-large and it needs to be thinned out.

plus the whole darker lines thing.

aside from that it's pretty good, actually. good job.

So pretty much:

Fix lines (Cleaner, darker etc)

Less overbite, or leave it. I guess it's opinion?

Fix eyes

Fix head

Anything else?


Also, I have GIMP, I'm not that bad with it, I'll try to mess around with it now.


Ah, yes. Lastly, thank you for the praise and criticism! :)

UPDATE:

Decided to Ink up the drawing and add colors to the Letters.

http://ic3.deviantart.com/fs13/f/2007/089/0/6/Annelid__ish_Thing_Inked_Up_by_Iced_Kirby.jpg
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/52049381/


Better or worse?

a bit rough as far as the lines go, but for a start that is absolutely amazing. keep at it. you should be interesting to keep an eye on.

Better or worse?
...the same?

It looks better, because it's clearer, but... it's still the same picture -- the eyes are still too far to the right and the overbite is still a bit larger than T17 draw it.

(Oddly enough the eyes are in almost exactly the right place relative to the lower jaw.)

a bit rough as far as the lines go, but for a start that is absolutely amazing. keep at it. you should be interesting to keep an eye on.

Thank you!

I might have to start to try coloring it, but then again I was never really a coloring person. ;)

UPDATE:

Decided to Ink up the drawing and add colors to the Letters.

http://ic3.deviantart.com/fs13/f/2007/089/0/6/Annelid__ish_Thing_Inked_Up_by_Iced_Kirby.jpg
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/52049381/


Better or worse?

Better. A little.
But try to make the eyes look even. The right eye has a big bump sticking out of the side of it.
And move both of the eyes to the left.

@everyone: The overbite is FINE! it's a style thing.

Compared to my blah-art, that's great the way it is! And since you inked it, now I can see the topsy-turvy words at the bottom!

Compared to my blah-art, that's great the way it is! And since you inked it, now I can see the topsy-turvy words at the bottom!

For other people, they say:

lol, peanuts, fudge, shoopwoop.

Don't ask. :p

why does this end here? add summore sketchy stuff!

why does this end here? add summore sketchy stuff!

Heh, I should, shouldn't I?


I did draw some new stuff, but I never got to scan it.

I'll try to look for them...