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robowurmz
29 Aug 2006, 17:14
*gulp* Here is my first MS paint worm. I hope you like my new style...
L-i-n-k! (http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/38892955/)

maveristef
29 Aug 2006, 17:16
*gulp* Here is my first MS paint worm. I hope you like my new style...

Uhm? It would help to have a picture.

Liketyspli
29 Aug 2006, 17:19
Yeah, you forgot to post the pic, lmao.

robowurmz
29 Aug 2006, 17:29
Fixed!
Thismessageistooshortbutidon'tcaresogoawayrightnow littlebox

agent luke
29 Aug 2006, 17:38
Hmm. not bad, But, The outline of the eyes are too thick. and the worm is Face-ing sideways but the eyes are face-ing the screen. other than that it good.

Pigbuster
29 Aug 2006, 17:42
The lineart is rather... bad.
His tail also looks a little weird to me. Like it's a thumb.

robowurmz
29 Aug 2006, 17:47
*grins so widely that everyone edges away*
I'm pleased with all-a da input. :)
*goes off to change sigworm and make himself a lot cooler and less stupid looking. And to find some salt crackers. They're here somewhere.*
*and work on his worms drawing style*

WormOfFire
29 Aug 2006, 18:14
Hmm. not bad, But, The outline of the eyes are too thick. and the worm is Face-ing sideways but the eyes are face-ing the screen. other than that it good.

I second that...

Still i think it's C.R.A.P (Crappily rushed awful picture)

:p

Star Worms
29 Aug 2006, 18:30
What's going on with his mouth? It's pointing off to the side and his eyes are right in the middle. It looks like you spent just a few minutes making it.

UnKnown X
29 Aug 2006, 18:31
That worm needs to cut down on the eye liner. It's not a 13-year-old girl on MySpace. :(

robowurmz
29 Aug 2006, 18:34
What's going on with his mouth? It's pointing off to the side and his eyes are right in the middle. It looks like you spent just a few minutes making it.

Wow, are you pshychic?
I only spent 2 minutes making it, I just wanted to see what you thought of my style. (All my worms have an overbite at the side. It's in their DNA.)



I dont really know how to make the lip face the front, or make the eyes go sideways, without him looking like a retarded maniac!

Liketyspli
29 Aug 2006, 19:04
more like this, it should be.
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Updated with new pic XD

robowurmz
29 Aug 2006, 19:06
Thankyou!:)
Now I can draw SIDEWAYS!
Yipee!

farazparsa
29 Aug 2006, 19:10
Looks kinda like Luke's worms. You decide if that's good or bad.

BuffaloKid
29 Aug 2006, 19:44
more like this, it should be.
Updated with new pic XD

Except... the eyebrows need moving too

Paul.Power
29 Aug 2006, 19:51
Personally I preferred your old style. It was unique, and "unique and slightly off" beats "standard but slightly off" any day (I should know :p)

agent luke
29 Aug 2006, 20:12
Looks kinda like Luke's worms. You decide if that's good or bad.



....Take that back or i'll stick my pistol in your ear and fire!!!

BuffaloKid
29 Aug 2006, 20:40
....Take that back or i'll stick my pistol in your ear and fire!!!

Take back that your art may be good or bad depending on who perceives it and how?

Yes, it is rather like Agent Luke's style.

Liketyspli
29 Aug 2006, 21:00
Except... the eyebrows need moving too
ok, like that then.

Oh and no, its more like Drak's style but better. Much better

robowurmz
31 Aug 2006, 07:38
I have my new style! Hooray! The link will be up soon! ;)

WormOfFire
31 Aug 2006, 14:57
I have my new style! Hooray! The link will be up soon! ;)

Soon?

...*watches clock tick*

Liketyspli
31 Aug 2006, 17:09
...*watches clock tick*

Wow, your life must be boring XD

robowurmz
31 Aug 2006, 19:15
It's HERE! HOOOOORAAAAY!
Finally! ;)
LINKY! (http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/39013826/)

Paul.Power
31 Aug 2006, 19:21
That's not bad, actually. Trouble is, the pic's too small for me to judge it accurately.

robowurmz
31 Aug 2006, 19:23
Click on the picture to get it bigger.

Paul.Power
31 Aug 2006, 19:57
Click on the picture to get it bigger.Yes, about 10% bigger. That's not good enough.

Liketyspli
31 Aug 2006, 20:13
i think Paul means the size of the worms, make a bigger worm, so we can judge your style.

Plasma
31 Aug 2006, 20:19
i think Paul means the size of the worms, make a bigger worm, so we can judge your style.
...and a bigger text...
...and a bigger frame...

farazparsa
31 Aug 2006, 20:20
Small indeed.

robowurmz
1 Sep 2006, 07:28
Okay...you asked for it...
BIG NEW STYLE (http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/39048344/)

(don't forget to click on it..)
(oh yeah, it's massive when you do click on it)

WormGod
1 Sep 2006, 08:31
Now it looks bad.

Paul.Power
1 Sep 2006, 08:42
That's better.

Now we need to work on your comic-craft, though:

1. You've got vast swathes of empty space in most panels. Consider making them smaller. The strip would have been just as good on half the amount of paper.

2. The width of the worm's neck changes from panel to panel. You don't have to be robotic about it, of course, but a little bit of consistency helps.

3. Draw panel borders with a ruler, and use pencil rather than ink so you can correct mistakes.

robowurmz
1 Sep 2006, 16:50
Thankyou very much for the helpful criticism. :)

But it was pretty good considering it was my first shot at a new style, eh?

P.S About his neck, it helps display his emotion. The one where he is just staring bug-eyed at the grenade, his neck is really thin, so it helps exaggerate the fact that his eyes are huge.

wigwam the
1 Sep 2006, 17:32
one more bit of advice-

try using seperate squares for each panel instead of just a line. it's easier to see individaul frames and tell the ground level from the edge of the panel.

Liketyspli
1 Sep 2006, 17:49
i would say, make the worms bigger and the panels smaller... you get my point, that you dont see only background and a bit of worm...

robowurmz
2 Sep 2006, 08:03
Okay, thanks for the tips. I'll get back to you all soon with use of the tips.