*gulp* Here is my first MS paint worm. I hope you like my new style...
L-i-n-k! (http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/38892955/)

*gulp* Here is my first MS paint worm. I hope you like my new style...

Uhm? It would help to have a picture.

Yeah, you forgot to post the pic, lmao.

Fixed!
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Hmm. not bad, But, The outline of the eyes are too thick. and the worm is Face-ing sideways but the eyes are face-ing the screen. other than that it good.

The lineart is rather... bad.
His tail also looks a little weird to me. Like it's a thumb.

*grins so widely that everyone edges away*
I'm pleased with all-a da input. :)
*goes off to change sigworm and make himself a lot cooler and less stupid looking. And to find some salt crackers. They're here somewhere.*
*and work on his worms drawing style*

Hmm. not bad, But, The outline of the eyes are too thick. and the worm is Face-ing sideways but the eyes are face-ing the screen. other than that it good.

I second that...

Still i think it's C.R.A.P (Crappily rushed awful picture)

:p

What's going on with his mouth? It's pointing off to the side and his eyes are right in the middle. It looks like you spent just a few minutes making it.

That worm needs to cut down on the eye liner. It's not a 13-year-old girl on MySpace. :(

What's going on with his mouth? It's pointing off to the side and his eyes are right in the middle. It looks like you spent just a few minutes making it.

Wow, are you pshychic?
I only spent 2 minutes making it, I just wanted to see what you thought of my style. (All my worms have an overbite at the side. It's in their DNA.)



I dont really know how to make the lip face the front, or make the eyes go sideways, without him looking like a retarded maniac!

more like this, it should be.
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Updated with new pic XD

Thankyou!:)
Now I can draw SIDEWAYS!
Yipee!

Looks kinda like Luke's worms. You decide if that's good or bad.

more like this, it should be.
Updated with new pic XD

Except... the eyebrows need moving too

Personally I preferred your old style. It was unique, and "unique and slightly off" beats "standard but slightly off" any day (I should know :p)

Looks kinda like Luke's worms. You decide if that's good or bad.



....Take that back or i'll stick my pistol in your ear and fire!!!

....Take that back or i'll stick my pistol in your ear and fire!!!

Take back that your art may be good or bad depending on who perceives it and how?

Yes, it is rather like Agent Luke's style.

Except... the eyebrows need moving too
ok, like that then.

Oh and no, its more like Drak's style but better. Much better

I have my new style! Hooray! The link will be up soon! ;)

I have my new style! Hooray! The link will be up soon! ;)

Soon?

...*watches clock tick*

...*watches clock tick*

Wow, your life must be boring XD

It's HERE! HOOOOORAAAAY!
Finally! ;)
LINKY! (http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/39013826/)

That's not bad, actually. Trouble is, the pic's too small for me to judge it accurately.

Click on the picture to get it bigger.

Click on the picture to get it bigger.Yes, about 10% bigger. That's not good enough.

i think Paul means the size of the worms, make a bigger worm, so we can judge your style.

i think Paul means the size of the worms, make a bigger worm, so we can judge your style.
...and a bigger text...
...and a bigger frame...

Small indeed.

Okay...you asked for it...
BIG NEW STYLE (http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/39048344/)

(don't forget to click on it..)
(oh yeah, it's massive when you do click on it)

Now it looks bad.

That's better.

Now we need to work on your comic-craft, though:

1. You've got vast swathes of empty space in most panels. Consider making them smaller. The strip would have been just as good on half the amount of paper.

2. The width of the worm's neck changes from panel to panel. You don't have to be robotic about it, of course, but a little bit of consistency helps.

3. Draw panel borders with a ruler, and use pencil rather than ink so you can correct mistakes.

Thankyou very much for the helpful criticism. :)

But it was pretty good considering it was my first shot at a new style, eh?

P.S About his neck, it helps display his emotion. The one where he is just staring bug-eyed at the grenade, his neck is really thin, so it helps exaggerate the fact that his eyes are huge.

one more bit of advice-

try using seperate squares for each panel instead of just a line. it's easier to see individaul frames and tell the ground level from the edge of the panel.

i would say, make the worms bigger and the panels smaller... you get my point, that you dont see only background and a bit of worm...

Okay, thanks for the tips. I'll get back to you all soon with use of the tips.